I can see this gapfiller actually happening.

Quite possibly the sweetest thing anyone's ever said to me! Thank you. :)

There are some POV violations in the part where Brian sleeps over

What's really scary is that I sat here just now staring at those lines for a very long time, trying to wrap my brain around what was wrong. Oy. Amazing what we miss when we work so closely with something! Anyway, appreciate the heads-up.

Can I post a link to this at the LibertyDiner lj community?

Yes yes yes! I'm honored you deem it worthy. :D